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Dear Frank, | Dear Frank, | ||
I have spent a lot of time reading your article, and must say that I have lost myself several times. I think that you still use too much citations – you rely on thoughts of somebody else, and your own text only illustrates and | |||
Thank you for your effort - seems that you have studied the theme quite in depth after all, and hope that you have an insight to it now. My comments are mostly for your future writing - so that you have reflected experience from our course. | |||
I have spent a lot of time reading your article, and must say that I have lost myself several times. I think that you still use too much citations – you rely on thoughts of somebody else, and your own text only illustrates and interconnects them. That disrupts the logic – you never finish one idea, and often repeat something twice. Also, you start with German situation, some facts about periods of the trading process, and do not say what is it all about. Then follows the chapter “Introduction to the Carbon market” which provides very basic introduction and should be in the beginning – it is somewhere after very specified information. | |||
Also you are not very consistent with the case study genre – you speak almost exclusively about very general principles, and the illustration on real case is restricted. | Also you are not very consistent with the case study genre – you speak almost exclusively about very general principles, and the illustration on real case is restricted. | ||
The most valuable part is the “Lessons learned”. Here you really express your views. I appreciate that you have mentioned difficulties with the literature search, selection of the topic, and analysis of your theme. When you start writing next time, start from here, from your personal viewpoint, and find relevant arguments: what has the case of permission theft shown, and how could it happen? What | The most valuable part is the “Lessons learned”. Here you really express your views. I appreciate that you have mentioned difficulties with the literature search, selection of the topic, and analysis of your theme. When you start writing next time, start from here, from your personal viewpoint, and find relevant arguments: what has the case of permission theft shown, and how could it happen? What was really happenning? Then very basic outline of the problem – but it is really difficult, you have to go deep into the system. The other point (that should follow) is also problematic – what could we learn from that? The system needs to be made perfect – and so what? Every system needs to be improved… Finally, when you speak about the usefulness of the emission market, you bring in some new information on its limitations – this is not fair. | ||
Best | I hope it helps you to understand how to proceed next time, and once more thanks for all your effort! Best | ||
--[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 15:33, 10 March 2011 (CET) | --[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 15:33, 10 March 2011 (CET) |
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