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Well done on completing your assignment. You've used and created references well, and even managed to upload an image, so you can call yourselves qualified users of wiki now ;) The English needs some correcting, but overall it's understandable. | Well done on completing your assignment. You've used and created references well, and even managed to upload an image, so you can call yourselves qualified users of wiki now ;) The English needs some correcting, but overall it's understandable. | ||
Your case study is missing several points, however: | Your case study is missing several points, however: | ||
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* the study reads like a marketing leaflet but with all details about how Okoprofit achieves its goals; some concrete examples would have helped to understand what exactly it is that Okoprofit does (a reader wouldn't know without following one of the links) | * the study reads like a marketing leaflet but with all details about how Okoprofit achieves its goals; some concrete examples would have helped to understand what exactly it is that Okoprofit does (a reader wouldn't know without following one of the links) | ||
* what's with the long list of city names?! This is superfluous information | |||
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