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The text is very well written, especially the way you cite your sources, the logic etc.
Be careful to raise some important point at the end. You have actually two topics - one is media (which, being globalized, bring more risks than only homogenization - e.g. they stress importance of relatively not important messages while at the same moment "virtualize" real risks like wars and serious accidents - you can watch them while having dinner). The other theme is homogenization which could be caused by other features - market, tourism etc. Try to find real links between your selected topics and you may mention also these other factors.
You might mention cultural specifics of media - or are they neutral? Is not their objectivity one of the reason of homogenization?
--[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 17:10, 7 December 2009 (UTC)
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Dear Corinna,
Dear Corinna,


It is a pleasure to read your article. It is interesting and also your style of writing makes big sense and because you are really able to express your thoughts very well, it is easy and amiable to deal with your article.
It is a pleasure to read your article. It is interesting and also your style of writing makes big sense and because you are really able to express your thoughts very well, it is easy and amiable to deal with your article.


To not only congratulate you, I have some (but very little) comments for you to get the professional level you achieved a little higher hung! (Alright, you WERE very good!)
To not only congratulate you, I have some (but very little) comments for you to get the professional level you achieved a little higher hung! (Alright, you WERE very good!)


I will only comment the points I think I couldn’t score “high” or “yes” for hundred percent.  
I will only comment the points I think I couldn’t score “high” or “yes” for hundred percent.  
But to relative this: most of the time I thought it is only a very little less.
But to relative this: most of the time I thought it is only a very little less.


Alright, here you are! The facts which really might interest you:
Alright, here you are! The facts which really might interest you:


* Coherence of the content with the title and thesis: You describe the facts of global media results very good, even though in a sometimes partial way. Maybe the divergent opinions could be stressed up better and could be more underlined, so that the conclusion gains more emphasis. In the first sentence of your conclusion you made out that it is a matter of perception. Individually or homogenized taken perception? I think the link between the title and the content could be stronger tied.
* Coherence of the content with the title and thesis: You describe the facts of global media results very good, even though in a sometimes partial way. Maybe the divergent opinions could be stressed up better and could be more underlined, so that the conclusion gains more emphasis. In the first sentence of your conclusion you made out that it is a matter of perception. Individually or homogenized taken perception? I think the link between the title and the content could be stronger tied.
* Quality of the content from the methodological point of view: (see above) by having the connection not so precisely expressed, your good ideas and work is not shining as brightened as it could. That is not the best method… But the composition of the article itself is very good and as I think in a very good methodological mode.
* Quality of the content from the methodological point of view: (see above) by having the connection not so precisely expressed, your good ideas and work is not shining as brightened as it could. That is not the best method… But the composition of the article itself is very good and as I think in a very good methodological mode.
* Originality of the paper: I think I have already read very much divergent statements about this topic. It is an interesting theme, but neither new nor very much arousing. (but it is just a very personally position)
* Originality of the paper: I think I have already read very much divergent statements about this topic. It is an interesting theme, but neither new nor very much arousing. (but it is just a very personally position)
* Adequate references to prior and related works by other authors: You summarize the definitions very well, but sometimes I miss the connections between different opinions from different authors. Sometimes one statement stands isolated, not very much commentated from you, or related to a divergent statement. It is very good clustered together having the highlight put on describing one side of the theme beneath another, but I miss the academical discourse a (very) little bit.
* Adequate references to prior and related works by other authors: You summarize the definitions very well, but sometimes I miss the connections between different opinions from different authors. Sometimes one statement stands isolated, not very much commentated from you, or related to a divergent statement. It is very good clustered together having the highlight put on describing one side of the theme beneath another, but I miss the academical discourse a (very) little bit.
 
*As Jana has remarked already, the article does not handle the Homogenization theme so much, but the influencing aspect of global media in the process of cultural Homogenzation. But I think, if you just change the title into “The Globalization of media as part of Homogenization” you could reduce the work you should invest to your article to gain its last shine of brillance to a very suitable degree!
 
As Jana has remarked already, the article does not handle the Homogenization theme so much, but the influencing aspect of global media in the process of cultural Homogenzation. But I think, if you just change the title into “The Globalization of media as part of Homogenization” you could reduce the work you should invest to your article to gain its last shine of brillance to a very suitable degree!
 


Thanks for this nice piece of work and enjoy your score level at the end!
Thanks for this nice piece of work and enjoy your score level at the end!


Regards
Regards


Julia
Julia
   
   
4. General Recommendation for articles (highlight one option):
4. General Recommendation for articles (highlight one option):
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4.4.3. Quality of presentation is poor
4.4.3. Quality of presentation is poor


--[[User:Wolter|Wolter]] 09:55, 9 January 2010 (UTC)
== Assessment from January 4th ==
Remarks:
The text did not develope in a positive way as much as I have expected:
*It would be useful to define media in the beginning – and restrict the theme to only limited number of their functions (not include advertisements for example). Otherwise it is difficult to draw clear and concise conclusions.
*“We are not alone in this world and we need to care about the others just as for us.” – that is value based statement; it is not clear, how is the role of “media” associated with values like this. Could they possibly also spread hatred or some ideology of conflict instead?
*“That leads to a new closeness and feeling of togetherness.” – very vague, not supported by evidence, what about diversity of media and their perception e.g. in muslim world?
*Not clear relationship between media and culture – what is their role, how do they affect culture? How are they affected by different cultures on the other hand?
*Your new conclusion does not help very much in understanding the role of media. Why do these media concentrate on catastrophes (which are of course terrible) but do not analyze long lasting problems e.g. in Africa (Darfur) where much more people suffer and the problem could be solved if international community is more active? In this case the role of media could really analyze situation, help to find a solution, provoke some action towards it etc. In case of catastrophes – it is only a sensation, nothing more.
--[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 14:13, 14 January 2010 (UTC)


--[[User:Wolter|Wolter]] 09:55, 9 January 2010 (UTC)
== Assessment from December 8th ==
Hi Corina, your text is excellent and also the way you have discussed the questions was very good (although less is sometimes more wink).
The text is very well written, especially the way you cite your sources, the logic etc.
 
Be careful to raise some important point at the end. You have actually two topics - one is media (which, being globalized, bring more risks than only homogenization - e.g. they stress importance of relatively not important messages while at the same moment "virtualize" real risks like wars and serious accidents - you can watch them while having dinner). The other theme is homogenization which could be caused by other features - market, tourism etc. Try to find real links between your selected topics and you may mention also these other factors.
 
You might mention cultural specifics of media - or are they neutral? Is not their objectivity one of the reason of homogenization?
 
--[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 17:10, 7 December 2009 (UTC)
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