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* I do not understand the “Virtual water” paragraph – it is related to water management, not to the economic market of water (should be reflected in your title and abstract?) | * I do not understand the “Virtual water” paragraph – it is related to water management, not to the economic market of water (should be reflected in your title and abstract?) | ||
* please move the paragraphs from the Student theme page to the introduction of your article and write a real abstract (more brief). You could use parts of it, of course. | * please move the paragraphs from the Student theme page to the introduction of your article and write a real abstract (more brief). You could use parts of it, of course. | ||
== Assessment from December 8th == | |||
Jana Dlouhá | |||
Your text is good, even if I doubt about the content to a certain extent (quality of drinking water should be good for everyone, not only for rich?). You might mention some risks of water privatization and maybe list benefits more transparently. | |||
See more at http://portal.unesco.org/en/ev.php-URL_ID=5307&URL_DO=DO_TOPIC&URL_SECTION=201.html | |||
Best | |||
Jana | |||
--[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 13:57, 14 January 2010 (UTC) | --[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 13:57, 14 January 2010 (UTC) |
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