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Hi Fabian, your text is readable and easy to follow. it is shown in an academic style. it is making a migration as if the issue is the most important one in the field study of globalization. I'm sure one of your motivation bringing up this issue is the make people aware of the existence of the issue of migration. Our topic has some intersections here and there. You are pretty much talking about
Hi Irmawan, at first: It was very interesting to read your text, because it was googreadable and easy to understand- good essay. There are only a few comments which I want say to your essay. In the formal point of view: I’m not sure if your citation style is correct. I thought we should also make information of the book page from where you have your articles. Also, you took the big theme of global labor very precise in your relative short essay. The good structure of your essay let me recognize a red thread. I think that your title is one hundred percent the content of your essay. Once again your resource list, it is good that you work with so many resources, but in your resource list, add the publishing house as well and end with a full stop. I like the style you write your essay, it is easy to read and you have a big content of vocabulary.
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Global labor is one of the biggest themes which you can write about in part of globalization. My theme: Shaping globalization: migration in times of globalization is part of your theme of global labor. You use a logical structure in your text which let the reader realize your essay and its key points very fast. I think you have shown very good the risk of global labor out of different point of views, a good idea to put yourself in the situation of these human beings. You gave us many examples for the risks. But in my point of view there are also many chances for the people on the global labor market. When you read my essay you will see. When you could find also 2 or 3 more opportunities for your essay? Because the global labor is also a big chance for developing countries. Your conclusion is also very good you summarize your essay shortly and you suggest a discussion with interesting statements. You give solution approaches which are very interesting and give the essay a very interesting end.
Overall a god work which only need some little changes for being very good.
 
 


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