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I have spent a lot of time reading your article (I must say that I have lost myself several times as it was not easy to follow your thoughts :-)). You have brouth a lot of infomation about the problem, although it is still little bit fragmentary. I think that you still use too much citations – you rely on thoughts of somebody else, and your own text only illustrates and interconnects them. That disrupts the logic – you sometimes do not finish one idea, or repeat something twice. Also you might not discover what is the most important in some cases - e.g. you start with German situation, introduce some facts about periods of the trading process, but do not say what is it all about. Then follows the chapter “Introduction to the Carbon market” which provides very basic introduction and should be in the beginning – but now it is somewhere after very specified information. | I have spent a lot of time reading your article (I must say that I have lost myself several times as it was not easy to follow your thoughts :-)). You have brouth a lot of infomation about the problem, although it is still little bit fragmentary. I think that you still use too much citations – you rely on thoughts of somebody else, and your own text only illustrates and interconnects them. That disrupts the logic – you sometimes do not finish one idea, or repeat something twice. Also you might not discover what is the most important in some cases - e.g. you start with German situation, introduce some facts about periods of the trading process, but do not say what is it all about. Then follows the chapter “Introduction to the Carbon market” which provides very basic introduction and should be in the beginning – but now it is somewhere after very specified information. | ||
Also you are not very consistent with the case study genre – you speak almost exclusively about very general principles, and the illustration | Also you are not very consistent with the case study genre – you speak almost exclusively about very general principles, and the illustration of the real case is restricted. | ||
The most valuable part is the “Lessons learned”. Here you really express your views. I appreciate that you have mentioned difficulties with the literature search, selection of the topic, and analysis of your theme. When you start writing next time, start from here, from your personal viewpoint, and find relevant arguments: what has the case of permission theft shown, and how could it happen? What was really happenning? | The most valuable part is the “Lessons learned”. Here you really express your views, you are really authentic here. I appreciate that you have mentioned difficulties with the literature search, selection of the topic, and analysis of your theme. When you start writing next time, start from here, from your personal viewpoint, and find relevant arguments: what has the case of permission theft shown, and how could it happen? What was really happenning? Only then should follow a very basic outline of the problem – but it is really difficult, you have to go deep into the system. The other point (that should follow) is also problematic – what could we learn from that? The system needs to be made perfect – and so what? Every system needs to be improved… | ||
Finally, when you speak about the usefulness of the emission market, you bring in some new information on its limitations – this is not fair. You have to build upon what was previously said. | |||
I hope it helps you to understand how to proceed next time, and once more thanks for all your effort! Best | I hope it helps you to understand how to proceed next time, and once more thanks for all your effort! Best | ||