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By stating "[t]here are some positive steps associated with this decision" the article is already moving away from a neutral description of events and clearly takes sides by inferring that the proposal was mostly negative from the beginning. That is fine, but it should maybe be a clear statement of such. Currently, the opening opinion comes from the opposing Green camp only.
By stating "[t]here are some positive steps associated with this decision" the article is already moving away from a neutral description of events and clearly takes sides by inferring that the proposal was mostly negative from the beginning. That is fine, but it should maybe be a clear statement of such. Currently, the opening opinion comes from the opposing Green camp only.
It would be good to state the size of the contestable conservation fund in relation to the potential alleged financial windfall to be gained from mining (billions of dollars).
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The economic argument made by the government could be clearer in regard to the alleged amount of financial benefit to the country (e.g. some claims were in the realm of $90 billion for a country with a population of 4 million). Did the government say whether it had a plan for how to use that money? Maybe briefly state the arguments it used to rebut claims made about irreversible environmental damage (e.g. "surgical mining"). Would it be possible to bullet point Gerry Brownlee's four principal arguments?

Revision as of 16:40, 8 March 2011

Peer Review

This is a very good introduction to the issue of mining in New Zealand's Schedule Four land and neatly summarises the main points of contention, the arguments used by both sides and the positives that accrued from the dialogue process.

What follows are suggestions for potentially enhancing and clarifying the information contained in the article.

Introduction - facts and opinions

It would be useful for readers to know when exactly the National-led government proposed removing conservation land from Schedule 4 and what sparked the proposal to begin with (maybe a sentence or two on the state and structure of New Zealand's economy, and the political-economic philosophy of the government, if possible).

By stating "[t]here are some positive steps associated with this decision" the article is already moving away from a neutral description of events and clearly takes sides by inferring that the proposal was mostly negative from the beginning. That is fine, but it should maybe be a clear statement of such. Currently, the opening opinion comes from the opposing Green camp only.

It would be good to state the size of the contestable conservation fund in relation to the potential alleged financial windfall to be gained from mining (billions of dollars).

Conflict

The economic argument made by the government could be clearer in regard to the alleged amount of financial benefit to the country (e.g. some claims were in the realm of $90 billion for a country with a population of 4 million). Did the government say whether it had a plan for how to use that money? Maybe briefly state the arguments it used to rebut claims made about irreversible environmental damage (e.g. "surgical mining"). Would it be possible to bullet point Gerry Brownlee's four principal arguments?