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== 3. Written Comments for Author(s) == | == 3. Written Comments for Author(s) == | ||
First of all in my opinion, it is a very interesting article. I would like to read more about it, but I guess the time and the limited number of words did not allow it. | First of all in my opinion, it is a very interesting article. I would like to read more about it, but I guess the time and the limited number of words did not allow it. | ||
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Best regards, Lina. | Best regards, Lina. | ||
== 4. General Recommendation for articles (highlight one option): == | == 4. General Recommendation for articles (highlight one option): == | ||
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4.4.3. Quality of presentation is poor | 4.4.3. Quality of presentation is poor | ||
== Assessment from January 4th == | |||
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Henning, it is much better than the first version but not very changed since the previous one ;-). On the other hand, you have very extensive list of references and you work with them in a reasonable way. From the formal point of view you have to clarify the structure little bit (titles in the new version helped to a certain extent). From my point of view, it is not very much clear what you want to say in relation to the globalisation process and it would be better to express it very explicitly: E.g.: “Globalisation is global competition; the role of energy is crucial in it; technology used for power plants matters from environmental point of view (environment is a global phenomenon and should not be subject of competition but agreement). Here are advantages of certain technologies, and here are restrictions (in relation to accessibility, security AND environmental performance). This is future prospect.” | |||
The sentence “…spending more resources on innovations and refinements of existing and new technologies of power generation than any solar panel in Germany ever will.” convicts that you are all the time arguing with very fashionable (and sometimes not justifiable) trends of solar energy. It’s OK that you do not like them but you have to be very rational in your argumentation. And you still do not provide any reasonable argument against renewables – although there are plenty of them (low security, high price and even “ecological footprint” of their production etc.) | |||
--[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 14:35, 14 January 2010 (UTC) | |||
== Assessment from December 8th == | |||
Almost perfect, concerning the quality of your text see discussion to the page. You have to be more clear about what you want to say, not about what you do not want to hear :-) | |||
the text is well argued (very nice list of references and the way you cite your sources!) | |||
You could improve the overall logic - include dome titles and also do not hide your most important points! The main problem is the environmental risk related to the energy production, also security of energy supply. So, discuss it very briefly - pros and cons (of specific energy production technology) which could be weighted rationally after all. | |||
You have already written some conclusion, but please refine them together with the text! Are you looking for lower risk, raise of efficiency, compromise solution or what? | |||
--[[User:Jana Dlouha|Jana Dlouha]] 19:52, 7 December 2009 (UTC) | |||