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Talk:Security – global safety or collective danger?: Difference between revisions
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--[[User:Kasparek|Kasparek]] 20:49, 13 January 2010 (UTC) | |||
The text is almost perfect, only small remarks. As it is, the reader has a problem to orientate himslef, to see what you want to say - you have to include some paragraphs and structure it more logically (globalization conditions - resulting security risks - role of states and international organizations - possible solutions on the state and international levels etc.). Also your citations in the text should fit with the list of references. | The text is almost perfect, only small remarks. As it is, the reader has a problem to orientate himslef, to see what you want to say - you have to include some paragraphs and structure it more logically (globalization conditions - resulting security risks - role of states and international organizations - possible solutions on the state and international levels etc.). Also your citations in the text should fit with the list of references. | ||