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Fabian, your text is readable and easy to follow. it is shown in an academic style. it is making a migration as if the issue is the most important one in the field study of globalization. I'm sure one of your motivation bringing up this issue is the make people aware of the existence of the issue of migration. Our topic has some intersections here and there. That is probably one of the reasons Jana put us together as a reviewer to one another in the first place so we can look at our review in the closer look. One other thing I like about your text is that it is a focused and pinpointed text. In my opinion, since it is focused on a particular aspect of the migration, you could get deeper in the field of high skill migrant scope. | |||
One structural note in the format of your text is that probably is better looking when the abstract part is moved to the first part of the text. I would also like to comment on your content. Since you mention in the abstract that diaspora has managed to transfer money or know-how to their original country. You could also touch more on some percentage of immigrants who have educated in the developed country and settle as an immigrant as soon as they graduate as you mentioned in your first part of the content. Do you still considered them a part of diasporas though? Cause in my understanding they are not localized since they have their education and some life experiences in the developed country. This particular thing probably you could follow up. | One structural note in the format of your text is that probably is better looking when the abstract part is moved to the first part of the text. I would also like to comment on your content. Since you mention in the abstract that diaspora has managed to transfer money or know-how to their original country. You could also touch more on some percentage of immigrants who have educated in the developed country and settle as an immigrant as soon as they graduate as you mentioned in your first part of the content. Do you still considered them a part of diasporas though? Cause in my understanding they are not localized since they have their education and some life experiences in the developed country. This particular thing probably you could follow up. | ||
In terms of content once again, I found it interesting when you say “competition” as participation of some developed countries to gain the share of high-valued immigrant. The nature of competition should be exploring and applying the highest potential possible to gain the target. On the contrary you said that their attempts are half-hearted. When you are finalizing your text probably you could make a deeper exploration on the reference by Robin Cohen as your main source of the text. I feel that if you do that it will enrich the point that you have made successfully already. | In terms of content once again, I found it interesting when you say “competition” as participation of some developed countries to gain the share of high-valued immigrant. The nature of competition should be exploring and applying the highest potential possible to gain the target. On the contrary you said that their attempts are half-hearted. When you are finalizing your text probably you could make a deeper exploration on the reference by Robin Cohen as your main source of the text. I feel that if you do that it will enrich the point that you have made successfully already. | ||