Talk:Emissions Trading
Final assessment
Dear Frank,
Thank you for your effort - seems that you have studied the theme quite in depth after all, and hope that you have an insight to it now. My comments are mostly for your future writing - so that you reflect experience from our course.
I have spent a lot of time reading your article (I must say that I have lost myself several times as it was not easy to follow your thoughts :-)). You have brouth a lot of infomation about the problem, although it is still little bit fragmentary. I think that you still use too much citations – you rely on thoughts of somebody else, and your own text only illustrates and interconnects them. That disrupts the logic – you sometimes do not finish one idea, or repeat something twice. Also you might not discover what is the most important in some cases - e.g. you start with German situation, introduce some facts about periods of the trading process, but do not say what is it all about. Then follows the chapter “Introduction to the Carbon market” which provides very basic introduction and should be in the beginning – but now it is somewhere after very specified information.
Also you are not very consistent with the case study genre – you speak almost exclusively about very general principles, and the illustration on real case is restricted.
The most valuable part is the “Lessons learned”. Here you really express your views. I appreciate that you have mentioned difficulties with the literature search, selection of the topic, and analysis of your theme. When you start writing next time, start from here, from your personal viewpoint, and find relevant arguments: what has the case of permission theft shown, and how could it happen? What was really happenning? Then very basic outline of the problem – but it is really difficult, you have to go deep into the system. The other point (that should follow) is also problematic – what could we learn from that? The system needs to be made perfect – and so what? Every system needs to be improved… Finally, when you speak about the usefulness of the emission market, you bring in some new information on its limitations – this is not fair.
I hope it helps you to understand how to proceed next time, and once more thanks for all your effort! Best
--Jana Dlouha 15:33, 10 March 2011 (CET)
Peer review (Jan Jelínek)
| Criteria | High/Medium/Low | |
| Content | 9 | |
| Context | 6 | |
| Practical relevance | 8 | |
| Focus | 6 | |
| Clarity | 9 | |
| Critical approach | 10 | |
| Elaborateness (commitment) | 8 | |
| Individual input & risk-taking | 9 | |
| Reader's attractiveness | 10 | |
| Formal features | 9 | |
| Total (points) | 84 |
Written Comments for Author (Jan Jelínek)
Dear Frank,
I like your case study and I appreciate very much that I learned a few essential things about emissions trading which I have not heard so far. Before I start with the reviewing I will describe the structure of the evaluation process.
In the first part I describe your work in general and I focus on the overall form of work. The second part is devoted to the assessment of parts of the case study, where I will primarily try to concern on essential paragraphs.
Overall description
Your case study about the emissions trading discusses the difficult and broad topic. If it will be described "worldwide" it would be a great problem, and certainly this would not be possible in our form of a case study. It worked therefore well that you rather focused on European territories and Germany. The case study is divided in fourteen consecutive parts, but for the better viewer's orientation it could be better if some of them merge into larger units. Although these are only graphic changes and are not of high significance. After all your case study offers a diverse and unconventional processing of extensive theme.
Case study parts
'Emission Trading Scheme: a way to reduce the climate change and the effects of the global warming?'- This part is for me possible fragment of the previous state of your case study, but perhaps has a hidden sence. In each case it would need a graphic edit.
'Introduction facts' - During this part the viewer can read about the criminals which have found a lag in the European Union Emission Trading Scheme, but this example occurs in certain forms throughout the whole text and should be better describe.
'Why do we need Emission Trading?' - Well written paragraph where the colourful cases are explicit. Be careful about the linguistic form in whole case study - there are a few sentences like - "We have melting glaciers and polar bears which are melting and let rise the sea level." - which are far from correct ;-> Although I would like to assure you that you write well and language in your work seems of good quality and is readable.
The beginning of Emission Trading, How does emissions trading work in general? and Sale of surplus allowances or purchase of additional allowances - These chapters are oriented on the description of emissions trading system with gentle emphasis on the role of companies in this system. I found this part of the case study very essential and you show there a lot of not very obvious but very significant aspects.
In the following parts you generally offer a versatile look at the specifics associated with the emissions trading and link to the website of Clean Development Mechanism Watch is also very good. I just little lack a direct connection with the issue own for case studies, emission trading in the European context, appears to me too "selectively" processed.
Outlook - This concluding part very well and clearly concludes the case study and the ideas therein. One of the essential ideas which develops further the emissions trading issue, is "Concrete means that concerning on the emission rights that it’s not enough to limit such a system of Europe." and it is possible to see in it, as well as in other sentences of this part, that you have understand the case study object very well.
Thank you for the absorbing writing about the emission trading. I suppose that after few graphical and stylistic / formal changes your work will be alright and look gradely.
General Recommendation for articles :
Acceptable with minor modifications
Jan Jelínek, March 9th, 2011
Assessment of the preliminary stages
Saturday, 26 February 2011, 05:20 PM
Hello Frank, I appreciate that you have finalized the stage 5 of the module as the (almost) first one! I do not assess your work by points at this stage, only few comments (so that the reviewer does not see them). Here they are: For a case study, there is slightly too much general information (your practical and concrete example should be more described). There are too many citations for the text that is mainly theoretical - citations should illustrate somebody's views, not the theory (you should understand it and say in your own words).
Your conclusions are focused on too many things - there should be an outline of the experience from the case study so that it could be transferred to other context.
It is not fair that you mention some points in the conclusions which were not supported by arguments in the text! And finally there are some formal imperfectios (language, citations, even titles etc.) But this could be done after the review. I wish you success!
Best
Jana Dlouhá
Tuesday, 25 January 2011, 10:36 AM
Hello Frank! You have done quite a good literature review, and please see the assessment of it below. You need to focus more specifically on a concrete problem, and to invest slightly more energy in finding relevant resources for your purpose. Then also you will see some benefits and disadvantages (critical view).
There are few questions posed but they could be hardly answered in your case study. I think you haven't proceeded towards the first draft of the case study, did you? I will not evaluate this this time, but you have more work till the next stage.
Jana Dlouhá