Talk:Loss of biodiversity - caused and solved by globalisation?

Try to avoid too much hesitation like: "globalization is an abstract, not perfectly defined phenomenon you cannot say every global environmental problem is inevitable directly caused by globalization without a sound argumentation" - there are at least 5 words or phrases expressing your uncertainty.

On the other hand critical discussion of the theme from different points of view is OK.

The logic is clear: global economy -> global market -> global consumption of remote goods -> extraction of resources including biological -> transport and infrastructure -> further depletion

Thus, you could mention that even if globalization is not direct reason for biodiverzity loss, the consequences of the loss do have real impact on global environment and also policy. In fact, you have not mentioned risks related to this issue so far!

If discussiong economic value of biodiverzity you cannot avoid Millennium Assessment Reports, http://www.millenniumassessment.org/en/index.aspx

--Jana Dlouha 17:08, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

Peer-Review

Paper title: Loss of Biodiversity- caused and solved by Globalization?

1. Basic criteria

1.1. Relevance of the subject to the general theme (High/Medium/Low) high - medium

1.2. Coherence of the content with the title and thesis (High/Medium/Low) high

1.3. Quality of the content from the methodological point of view (see below) (High/Medium/Low) high - medium

1.4. Quality of the text from the formal point of view (see below) (High/Medium/Low) high

2. Summary Comments for Author(s)

2.1. Contribution to theory or practice (High/Medium/Low) medium

2.2. Originality of the paper (High/Medium/Low) high

2.3. Adequate references to prior and related works by other authors (High/Medium/Low) very high

2.4. Accurate information (Yes/No) Yes

2.5. Current information (Yes/No) Yes

2.6. Methodology (Yes/No) Yes

2.7. Writing style is generally (Excellent/Readable/Poor) Excellent

2.7.1. Paper is logically organised (Yes/No) Yes (see below)

2.7.2. Ideas are clearly presented (Yes/No) Yes (see below)

2.8. Meets submission requirements (abstract, length, style, citation rules) (Yes/No) Yes

3. Written Comments for Author(s)

Hey Jule, first of all I want to thank you for your feedback, I think some ideas are really helpful and I will try to improve the text. However, I will write you a personaI message, since I don't want this to look like I was trying to waste words... I like your essay, too, especially since this is a topic I am very interested in. There are a couple of annotations concerning content and structure, I hope they will serve you. Furthermore I would like to add, that I found it extremely interesting to read your essay, there are a lot of facts in there, which I didn't know before! Good selection of relevant and interesting facts therefore!

• Although I really like reading your text, it sometimes becomes obvious, that you had some problems in regards to the definition terms as to the final goal, which the essay should aim for. Sometimes it seems that you are unsure about your own opinion. I think what you are writing in your essay is indubitably true. So you should be more confident about what you are saying, since it is very true. Also for me, a leitmotif is missing. I had or still have my problems with that, too. Since you've got everything figured out in your mind, everything seems so obvious. Try to read your essay once again from a strangers point of view. Maybe you could lead over the different subchapters, that would make it easier to read.

• One minor edit: since the Copenhagen Conference is over now, you might want to refer to it as international agreements are hard to achieve. It might be interesting for you to know (just as a additional information) that someone from the university of Lüneburg was there and she was so aghast not only by the organisation but of course also by the results. We should not underestimate the conflict potential with which the topic of biodiversity comes along. I do like your attempt to refer to the lastest news, though!

• There are only some content ideas I want to share with you - all in all, you seem to have done a fabulous job in research! Since this is a topic of the utmost importance, I think you should stress the importance in your essay. So, why is it so important to maintain the biiodiversity? What would in case of an extreme loss of biodiversity be the consequences for every single one of us? I personally think, that these essays we are developing during this course are supposed to make us think and revise our own actions.

• Finally, I would like to add the fact, that I really love the idea of upgrading the reference list by further information

One more annotation on my own account: since time is running out, I didn't re-read my review yet. I will do this tomorrow and then delete this paragraph. Just to let you know in the unlikely case you still read this tonight and there's a sentence in this review which is not logical....

4. General Recommendation for articles (highlight one option)

4.1. Publish as is

4.2. Acceptable with minor modifications

4.3. Might be accepted after major modifications

4.4. Unacceptable (select following option):

4.4.1. Not appropriate for the content/theme of the Course

4.4.2. Technically deficient

4.4.3. Quality of presentation is poor --Wehling 19:48, 8 January 2010 (UTC)