Talk:Justifiable Risk or headless Fear? The Difference between experienced and factual Disadvantages of a Process called Globalisation

Thank you for ideas of improvement!

The text is very good and I see now that strong conclusions could be written even if you are dealing with not very concrete issues. The idea of accepting global risks and necessity to act under the threats is perfect - you only need to make clear what is common weal as it is culturally or even historically specific (now it is probably attached to economical benefits for everybody).

I still have difficulty to understand the paragraphs "logically" as different reason and consequences are mixed. But the text would be a perfect introduction to the articles of others. Make sure that you point out the social dimension of your concern.

--Jana Dlouha 13:19, 8 December 2009 (UTC)

=Peer-Review=

Paper title: Justifiable Risk or headless Fear? The Difference between experienced and factual Disadvantages of a Process called Globalisation

1. Basic criteria
1.1. Relevance of the subject to the general theme (High/Medium/Low) high

1.2. Coherence of the content with the title and thesis (High/Medium/Low) high

1.3. Quality of the content from the methodological point of view (see below) (High/Medium/Low) high-medium

1.4. Quality of the text from the formal point of view (see below) (High/Medium/Low) medium

2. Summary Comments for Author(s)
2.1. Contribution to theory or practice (High/Medium/Low) high

2.2. Originality of the paper (High/Medium/Low) very high

2.3. Adequate references to prior and related works by other authors (High/Medium/Low) high

2.4. Accurate information (Yes/No) Yes

2.5. Current information (Yes/No) Yes

2.6. Methodology (Yes/No) Yes

2.7. Writing style is generally (Excellent/Readable/Poor) Excellent

2.7.1. Paper is logically organised (Yes/No) Yes (see below)

2.7.2. Ideas are clearly presented (Yes/No) Yes (see below)

2.8. Meets submission requirements (abstract, length, style, citation rules) (Yes/No) Yes

3. Written Comments for Author(s)
Hey Svea, first of all I want to say that it was really interesting to read your essay- from my point of view it is a real good work!!! There are a few comments I want to make (but I want to emphasize that in total I really liked it) and I will differ them in the formal/ methodical ones and the ones in terms of content.


 * The formal/ methodical ones are finally two aspects: Your formal work with resources and your logical structure.


 * I think you worked with lots of different resources that’s quite good. But, and I’m not quite sure if this comment is justifiable: With want kind of citation style did you work: Maybe I got it wrong but I though we are supposed to use the APA style? Therefore it is common to write authors name (!), year and page in brackets. A few times I think you wrote the title in brackets. And to your reference list: In the APA style I think it is common to write the year just after the author, add the publishing house as well and end with a full stop. But probably I’m totally wrong and you used just another citation style we could work with. Then sorry!!!


 * When I first read your title I thought: “Wow, that could be everything”. But you solved this wide ranging theme in a fantastic way (see below). However because this theme so wide, from my point of view it is even more important for the (first) reader that the article has an logical structure the reader can realize really fast. Therefore you could maybe at the end of your introduction add a paragraph where you say what (and why) you will do in the following article to make the following logical structure clear. To emphasize this logical structure it would help if you would add small headings as well. As I sad above I think your essay is well structured, but this suggestions would make it even more pleasant to read (especially in the first time).

Before I will add a few comments to your essay in terms of content I want to emphasize that I really like your style of writing: You have obviously a good vocabulary and you use this well.


 * First of all your theme is very original and really important!!! Probably we do have different opinions in general to some aspects...But we should discuss about this in another place.
 * One main critical point is the part with “herefore the globalisation process did not narrow any of the countries‘ chances to improve their situation”. As I understand your essay in total you plead for a more pragmatic, differentiating discussion about the risks of globalization. From my point of view in this part you did almost the same mistake: Of course you cannot say that the “bad, bad globalization” is responsible in total for the situation of the lower developed countries. But for example through the globalization the EU-Agricultural-Subventions do haven an impact on the chances to improve their situation.
 * And last but not least another aspect would be very interesting in your essay: The relation between concerns and risks. That the globalization is not driven only by rational strengths. For example in the financial sector psychology plays a huge role. Therefore in some cases irrational concerns could turn into actual risks and get a real impact on the globalization.

4. General Recommendation for articles (highlight one option)
4.1. Publish as is

4.2. Acceptable with minor modifications

4.3. Might be accepted after major modifications

4.4. Unacceptable (select following option):

4.4.1. Not appropriate for the content/theme of the Course

4.4.2. Technically deficient

4.4.3. Quality of presentation is poor

--Jule 11:40, 8 January 2010 (UTC)